You
Told me once
You’d always love me
That forever we’d be one
Then you slept with another;
Broke my heart for good
Now there’ll be
None
(c) Sanch Vee @ Sanch Writes (12 April 2017)
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The Joseph’s Star, a poetry form created by Christina R Jussaume on 08/06/07 in memory of her Dad. This poem has no rhyme, and is written according to syllable counts. Syllables are 1, 3, 5, 7, 7, 5, 3, and 1. The poem may be written on any subject, be centre-aligned, has no stanza limit, and should have complete statements in each line.
This has been written for the 2017 A to Z Challenge
Heidi Kneale (Her Grace)
12 April 2017 at 10:53 amSuch a beautiful, heart-breaking poem.
Love your theme, especially as April is Poetry Month.
Romance Spinners
Shailaja Vishwanath
12 April 2017 at 11:35 amThat’s all it takes. One indiscretion, one moment of weakness to undo everything you’ve built up and worked for over months and years. How I wish this weren’t so but sigh. Loving the diamond structure in this one.
Shilpa Garg
12 April 2017 at 11:56 amAah! That’s sad. Betrayal erodes not only the physical and mental strength but also self-esteem,and shakes the very foundation. Another lovely poem, Sanch!
Shawna Atteberry
12 April 2017 at 12:02 pmI’ve never seen this poem form. I like it.
SHALINI BAISIWALA
12 April 2017 at 1:45 pmFirst up I love the structure – it looks amazing!! Secondly I hope you are considering the ebook – this is a reasure trove theme of yours and you must compile it up!!! Loved the feel of the poem! The heartbreak and disappointment comes out so clear.
Theme: Peregrination Chronicles (travel)
J is for Japanese dancers in the hot sands of Pushkar #atozchallenge
Sreesha
12 April 2017 at 2:36 pmAh, Sanch, your words… they just break my heart.
This form is like a combination of a haiku and a diamante (in my head at least). The syllables and the structure, I mean.
Bellybytes
12 April 2017 at 3:39 pmWhat do I like more your images or your poetry? Another wonderful work that is just haunting
Geets
12 April 2017 at 5:12 pmThe diamond structure looks wonderful! And how just one simple mistake destroys everything one builds in a relationship.
Cheers
Vinodini
12 April 2017 at 7:36 pmI wonder how you string your words together to form a shape like this. Deception is the worst of the things to encounter.
Suzy
12 April 2017 at 8:40 pmAnother Your poem tells a story that happens more often than not.
Suzy
12 April 2017 at 8:41 pmwhat happened to my sentence – I meant to say another interesting form.
Sheethal
12 April 2017 at 9:08 pmBeautiful. Somehow the structure and poem goes hand in hand.
Shalini R
12 April 2017 at 9:30 pmThat’s heartbreaking, truly.
Love the shape of the poem. Like a diamond. It is because of the syllable rule, I guess 🙂
Team MocktailMommies
12 April 2017 at 9:46 pmWhat a wise and lovely choice of words to express the gamut of emotions! And appreciate the fine balance you had to make a Joseph’s star! Incredible!!!!
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Anagha From Team MocktailMommies
Collage Of Life
Cathy Graham
12 April 2017 at 10:30 pmWhat a lovely and sad poem! Loved learning about that special poem structure. Good for you doing a whole month of poems in different styles. Hope you’re enjoying the challenge!
Namratha
12 April 2017 at 11:33 pmStrong emotions expressed perfectly in few words. Loving the structure of the poem. Tempted just a teeny-tiny bit to try writing some poetry after reading yours every day. Will be back:)
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Soumya
13 April 2017 at 12:21 amAnd a heartbreak it is! Infidelity is a deal breaker, always.
Love the star structure, it does look beautiful.
Roshan Radhakrishnan
13 April 2017 at 1:23 amNice structure… re-read after finding out the ‘each line must make sense individually’ bit… seriously, well done in preparing really excellent examples for each.
Kaddu
13 April 2017 at 3:12 amThis form sounds simple enough. Center align makes sense for this. Betrayal is hurtful like nothing else.
Happy AtoZing!
Chicky @ http://www.mysteriouskaddu.com
Menaka Bharathi
13 April 2017 at 9:17 pmThat’s truly a heart breaking poem with lots of emotions…Yes betrayal and heartbroken is brought out well in the lines
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