There was lipstick on his collar. Fiery Red, she noted. Not one of her favourites. She was more a Wine Red lipstick kind of girl. She sniffed his shirt and took in the scent of his musky cologne. Mixed within, her sharp sense of smell caught a whiff of jasmine. Being allergic to perfumes, she knew it didn’t belong to her.
She stood holding the shirt over the washing machine, her eyes filling with tears. It would be easy to throw it in and pretend none of this was true. But it would be nicer if he was caught red-handed. After all, they had been married for twenty years. She decided to leave his shirt on the bed with the lipstick glaring at anyone who looked.
As she left the room, her teenage son yelled out, ‘Mum, is it okay if I borrow dad’s white shirt again? It makes me a hit with the girls.’
(c) Sanch V @ Sanch Writes (4 August 2016)
This has been written for Day 4 of the BarAThon Challenge at Blog-a-rhythm
Cathy Graham
4 August 2016 at 10:01 pmLoved it, Sanch! You did a great job building the tension and making us feel for the woman character. What a great twist at the end! Wonderful piece of flash fiction!
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Sanch, the writer
4 August 2016 at 10:07 pmThank you Cathy 🙂 I wasn’t sure if I was able to sell it well enough but your comment has reassured me
Suman Kher
4 August 2016 at 10:04 pmNice one! 🙂 The bonus is it is short and crisp and yet gets the effect
Sanch, the writer
4 August 2016 at 10:06 pmThanks Suman 🙂
Mayuri
4 August 2016 at 10:09 pmPhew! You almost got me worried there!
Awesome writing, and take on the prompt!
Sunila Vig
4 August 2016 at 10:43 pmGoshhh what a relief 🙂 Good one Sanch.
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Ramya
4 August 2016 at 10:50 pmAwesome! Nice twist Sanch ☺
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Shilpa Gupte
4 August 2016 at 10:59 pmWow, girl! You do know how to arrest your readers with the twist at the end, haan?! My heart almost went out to that poor woman!
Beat About the Book
4 August 2016 at 11:21 pmHa ha.. that was a good one – short and so sweet.
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Uma
4 August 2016 at 11:37 pmPerfectly done, that too in so few words! Loved how the twist came in.
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Anita
4 August 2016 at 11:51 pmPhew! That’s great, Sanch 🙂
Now Mom will get to smell newer fragrances!
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Mithila Menezes @fabulus1710
5 August 2016 at 2:19 amThe tears and the drama, and the glass shattering twist! Perfect execution, Sanch!
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Dan Antion
5 August 2016 at 5:56 amNice twist 🙂
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Inderpreet Uppal
5 August 2016 at 6:45 pmBoys!! I say they are a crazy lot! I can easily see this happening!!
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Rajlakshmi
9 August 2016 at 5:44 pmOhh thank god… I absolutely loved the twist at the end 😉 wonderful storytelling
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Holly
9 September 2017 at 10:15 pmOh, hooray! Disaster averted! Love it.
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