(c) Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
We sit next to each other as we always have for the last ten years. Staring at the television, watching but not really seeing. No words are needed.
I tried my best to make you love me. Cooked. Cleaned. Looked after you. I longed for warmth; you gave me coldness instead. I cried; you laughed. Your eyes said it all, cold with hatred. Your punches and kicks too.
Ten years of bruises. A decade of pain. Copious tears.
Today, however there’s a smile on my lips.
Your eyes are still cold but this time, there’s no life in them.
(c) Sanch Vee @ Sanch Writes (1st July 2016)
Word Count: 99. Written for Friday Fictioneers. It’s my very first time joining Rochelle Wisoff-Fields and other writers. You can check out other entries here.
Dahlia
1 July 2016 at 3:43 pmWell finally happily ever after – even if it is 10 years late 😉
Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 10:03 pmBetter late than never! 😀
Vinay Leo R.
1 July 2016 at 4:35 pmYeah. The coldness is contagious. Even the warmest, most adjusting of hearts would turn cold at such treatment. Chilling write-up, Babby (no pun intended).
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Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 10:04 pmThanks Vinay…and great unintended pun! 😀
Mike
1 July 2016 at 8:08 pmO dear, she’s gone and done it, I wonder can she escape the consequences, but I do understand. Well written.
Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 10:03 pmThere may be a defense for that in court 😉
Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
1 July 2016 at 9:05 pmDear Sanch,
It’s my pleasure to welcome you to Friday Fictioneers. The use of cold eyes is very effective. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 10:02 pmThank you for the warm welcome Rochelle! And the lovely feedback 🙂
Geets
1 July 2016 at 10:12 pmThat really is an impressive piece to read in such less words Sanch!
Cheers
Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 10:02 pmThank you Geets! 🙂
Shantala
1 July 2016 at 11:57 pm10 years too late, but in this case – better late than never. Yay freedom!
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Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 10:02 pmHaha…better late than never, right?
Angela
2 July 2016 at 3:53 amExcellent story, good for her!
Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 10:01 pmThanks Angela!
seekeroftruthweb
2 July 2016 at 12:29 pmAs Rochelle said below, welcome to Friday Fictioneers! Great story — I think my mom will cheer the narrator on!
Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 9:53 pmThank you!
Parul Thakur
2 July 2016 at 10:28 pmWell done. A revenge to make her smile. For all that she suffered, she needed that.
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Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 9:52 pm🙂
Corinne Rodrigues
4 July 2016 at 1:54 amAll too true! Sadly the abuse reaches out from the grave, unless healing work is done.
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Sanch, the writer
4 July 2016 at 9:52 pmOh definitely agree with that…trauma continues through generations!
Heidi Busby Brown
6 July 2016 at 10:31 pmFab take on the prompt! Loved it, fantastic last line giving you the twist and a moment of triumph! And love the title 😉 Heidi x