
Everyone seemed to have a story about their first kiss around the campfire that night. Yet, Susie was not sure if she wanted to share her story with the other girls.
β…and then he threw up all over me,β ended Kirsten with a disgusted look on her face. βOf course, that was the first and last kiss for us!β
βWorst. First kiss. Ever.β said Jo sympathising with her best friend.
The Year 12 girls were enjoying their first school camp of the year and as was inevitable, began sharing juicy stories around the fire. It had been Joβs idea to change the usual truth and dare kind of games the girls normally played. And why wouldn’t she, thought Susie. After all, Jo always had great stories to share.
βWhoβs next?β asked Jo breaking into Susieβs thoughts.
As Emma volunteered her first-kiss story, Susie wondered if she could somehow slink away unnoticed. She didn’t need any more reminders of her first kiss. Not that she was short of them. She could still vividly remember everything about it as though it happened just yesterday and not eight years ago. The scent of his musky aftershave filling her nostrils, the coarseness of his recently shaven face against her skin, the minty breath as he stuck his tongue into her mouth and the cheesy melody of βI want it that wayβ playing in the background all intruded her senses till this day. She still couldn’t listen to the Backstreet boys without feeling nauseated. Although, truth be told, that might have had to do more with the music than its relation to her first kiss.Β The smell of mint made her dizzy and she couldn’t stand the scent of musk.
βYour turn Suzeβ said Jo interrupting her nightmares.
βFirst kiss, huh?β said Susie. βItβs pretty lame actually. Not worth talking about.β She hoped theyβd let her off easy.
But they wouldn’t.
βIt was with a guy I met couple of summers ago at Coffs. Danny. In his car. The only cool thing about it all was that he had a tongue piercing.β She smiled at all the oohs and aahs of the girls at the βtongue piercingβ. βI canβt remember how long it lasted. Honestly!β she lied easily while trying to push away images of her bruised lips.
Fortunately for Susie, the girls got bored with her not-so-juicy story and moved on leaving her with her demons.
If only she could move on.
But itβs hard to move on when you have to live with your fatherΒ every day.
(c) Sanch – Living My Imperfect Life
photo credit: Daniel Stark via photopin cc
***I wrote this as one of my initial narrative pieces for one of my units. Not too pleased with it but figured I could post it here.***
Until next time,
Cheers!!!

Anastasia Amour
29 October 2014 at 11:17 amWoaaaah! Twist!
Sanch @ Living my Imperfect Life
29 October 2014 at 12:21 pmThanks! π
Rajlakshmi
29 October 2014 at 12:08 pmThat’s quite a twist … shame that these things happen in reality too. Brilliant narration Sanch.
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Sanch @ Living my Imperfect Life
29 October 2014 at 12:22 pmThanks Raj! I think all those 55 fictions made me want to write something with a twist in the last line! π
Vidya Sury
29 October 2014 at 1:45 pmWhoaaa! That last line clinched it. Go on, Sanch, go on…please. π
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Sanch @ Living my Imperfect Life
29 October 2014 at 2:40 pmThanks Vidya! π I’ll see if I can make it into a longer piece…or a longer short story. π
nabanita
29 October 2014 at 3:22 pmOh my..the last line left knots in my staomach!
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CookieCrumbs Inc.
29 October 2014 at 4:04 pmUgh. This is far too true for far too many people. I hate that the world is like this.
Inderpreet Kaur Uppal
31 October 2014 at 3:59 amThe anguish unfolds brilliantly. Sad but a reality. You have written it very well. Can see it going further as Vidya has mentioned. Keep writing.
Shilpa Garg
1 November 2014 at 2:53 amDidn’t see it coming. A wonderful twist, Sanch! Feel bad for Susie! π
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