(c) Over Cups of Coffee
Where is it you go
When you leave me
Each night
Why don’t you tell me
The exact path of
Your flight
I wait
I wonder
I live
In fear
Of not knowing
Of yearning
Wondering
When is it that you’ll return…
Until next time,
Cheers!!!
Ankita
30 June 2014 at 2:19 pmnice words weaving a suspense that is interesting! Such murky partners are a real headache..hehe!
loved it 🙂
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Glasgowdragonfly
30 June 2014 at 5:29 pmLove the dreamy quality of the word flow here. Good work!
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Jennifer
30 June 2014 at 8:33 pmThese short lones do such a great job of building the feeling of distraction and worry.
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Jennifer
30 June 2014 at 8:33 pm*lines 🙂
Soumya
30 June 2014 at 8:49 pmThe open end is the best part of this piece!
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Kristin
30 June 2014 at 9:06 pmThe “exact path of your flight” reminds me of how I follow along on-line whenever my husband has a long flight. It’s comforting, even as it’s misleading.
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Cindy Knapper
30 June 2014 at 10:22 pmVery nice imagery!
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chamblee54
1 July 2014 at 12:10 amWhy would you want to fly? Mermaids swim.
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Kathy Combs
1 July 2014 at 12:40 amI like the tension you built with your words and the wondering question at the end. Nice!
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Kir
1 July 2014 at 12:59 amis he out stealing mermaids?
I loved the flow of this, the questioning was tense even if the answers weren’t coming.
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that cynking feeling
1 July 2014 at 5:43 amPoor thing – it’s the not knowing that stinks.
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KymmInBarcelona
1 July 2014 at 8:29 pmI already have about five different ‘you’s for this. Lovely, dreamy words!
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CRD
1 July 2014 at 11:29 pmSometimes it’s better not to know where someone goes. It’s a recipe for self-destruction, but what you don’t know about can’t kill you.
On second thoughts, don’t be a doormat. Shake off the dust and walk away.
Updated my blog with a picture-parody of SHOLAY. Hope you like it.
Cheers
CRD
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Ann Bennett (@AnnBennett12)
2 July 2014 at 2:19 amGreat job of building emotion. I can see a child worried over a parent leaving for work and not understanding.