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It was 12 year old Nina’s first day of high school and she knew things were going to be different. A new place with new people who didn’t know her or anything about her history.
She entered with an air of confidence and went to her class for roll call.
Just as the teacher came to the letter M, she heard the dreaded words: “Allison McCall” and the response “Here”.
It couldn’t be…she couldn’t be here.
She looked in the direction of the familiar voice and saw her — Allison — with a smirk on her beautiful face.
The pain, the humiliation, the fear, the guilt — all these uncomfortable emotions came rushing back to Nina — Allison would never ever let her forget and get on with her life.
No, thought Allison, correctly reading Nina’s mind; she’d never let Nina get away with the murder of her twin. Because no matter what the police thought, Allison knew that an 8 year old Nina had stood gleefully watching Allison’s twin drown in front of her eyes.
***Written for Write Tribe Festival of Words Day 1: 9 sentence fiction***
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Corinne Rodrigues
2 March 2014 at 7:20 pmOh dear! This sounded so true to life, PB. I know someone who in his sixties hasn’t got over the fact that his brother drowned because he didn’t have the courage to call out for help. 🙁
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Psych Babbler
2 March 2014 at 7:24 pmIt is scary sometimes isn’t it? Some kids just don’t know what to do and they carry the guilt with them forever…
Rajlakshmi
2 March 2014 at 7:38 pmWoaa awesome ending… At first it feels like nina is the victim but thats isn’t so. Well written.
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Psych Babbler
2 March 2014 at 7:45 pmThanks Rajlakshmi! 🙂
Nibha
2 March 2014 at 7:54 pmThat’s scary past that follows her forever! Well written!
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Psych Babbler
2 March 2014 at 8:00 pmThanks Nibha! 🙂
Vidya Sury
2 March 2014 at 8:27 pmScary stuff to think that both girls must live with their thoughts all their lives. A good read for the prompt, Psych!
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2 March 2014 at 8:38 pmIt is a bit sad for both Vidya as they are unable to let go…
Sreeja Praveen
2 March 2014 at 8:30 pmAh… the first thought was a little sympathy for Nina, but that wasn’t to be, when Allison is the one who deserves it. Well woven tale, PB 🙂
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Psych Babbler
2 March 2014 at 8:39 pmI like that the story was able to do that Sreeja! 🙂
shellymona
2 March 2014 at 8:36 pmPoor Nina….her dreadful past is following her as a shadow and pulling back to those uncomfortable feelings that may never allow her to lead a natural life…Parental support may help in such real life cases….
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Psych Babbler
2 March 2014 at 9:02 pmTrue…the support of parents is so crucial in difficult times but then again, sometimes parents don’t have an understanding either in terms of how to deal with this! Thanks for the comment Shellymona!
KP
2 March 2014 at 8:41 pmI can understand children or even adults getting dazed and numb in a crisis not knowing what to do.But this ‘gleefully watching’ hurts very much.The guilt in her mind will never be erased.
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2 March 2014 at 9:03 pmWelcome here KP! Yeah…it is bit disturbing. I was going for the psychopathic angle here but not sure if I managed that well enough… 😛
Aditi
2 March 2014 at 8:55 pmThis gave me the chills…can’t imagine the kind of guilt n fear faced by one who has experienced something similar….Scary!
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Psych Babbler
2 March 2014 at 9:20 pmThanks Aditi…glad the story was able to do that. It would be pretty sad in real life for someone to go through this…
usha menon
2 March 2014 at 11:28 pmIt gave me goosebumps while reading this scary story. Nicely written.
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Roshan R
3 March 2014 at 1:24 amWonderful story. Till the last line, I could not guess where it was heading. A superb take on the prompt.
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Shailaja V
3 March 2014 at 3:20 pmPB, you minx! That was a shocking twist! Well played 🙂
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dreamzandclouds
3 March 2014 at 5:19 pmThis one was disturbing…….and kudos to you for successfully leading us to an unexpected end, that too in 9 sentences! 🙂
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vishalbheeroo
3 March 2014 at 5:58 pmGosh! That’s so sad and it can happen to many of us. The ghost of the past always haunt no matter what we say. Good one:)
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Richa Singh
3 March 2014 at 11:36 pmReally! At that young an age :O
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Shilpa Garg
4 March 2014 at 3:29 amOMG! That was a chilling end to a story well narrated!! Poor Allison!
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Jyothi Nair
4 March 2014 at 4:16 amOh God! That is not something that a child should live with. I didn’t like the word “gleefully” at all! That makes it more sinister!
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