This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 23; the twenty-third edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for this month is FREE.
For years I have longed for
Release from this relationship
Ever so far from you I’d go
Escaping your hurtful blows and whips
Fortunate I was, to
Run away some years ago
Even though you caught me later
Even though you punished me so
For I had seen what it was like
Remaining away from you
Enhanced by a taste for life
Existing by myself for that day or two
Flying away from this nest
Ruminating on what next to do
Engaging with that plan in mind
Enabled me to put up with you
Finally, the awaited day arrived
Rosy morning, a day so clear
Escape plan vivid in my mind, I
Entranced you into bed, my dear
Forever the image of you carved in my brain
Rasping for breath and stemming gushing blood in vain
Echoing sounds I’d uttered in pain, I
Ensured you’d never hurt me again
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Until next time,
Cheers!!!
CRD
15 August 2011 at 6:10 amThat was really creative 🙂 Though I couldn’t figure out whether the gal hurt herself or her tormentor.
All the best for the Blog A Ton contest
Here’s my entry
Them
Slaves
Cheers
CRD
Psych Babbler
15 August 2011 at 7:49 amWelcome here CRD! It was meant to be a bit cryptic so you can interpret it any way you like…thanks for the wishes. Good luck to you too! Heading over to check yours out too…
Someone is Special
15 August 2011 at 8:08 amHope the hurt is never again.. Good luck for Blog-a-Ton. Free… are we?
Someone is Special
Aativas
15 August 2011 at 10:03 amWhat a way to become free! Only those who do not allow others their freedom would understand in time!!
Psych Babbler
15 August 2011 at 10:52 amWelcome here SiS! Thanks for the comment and good luck to you too… 🙂
Psych Babbler
15 August 2011 at 10:53 amYep Aativas…the ultimate freedom. Hard to get but worth fighting for…
Chintan
15 August 2011 at 5:00 pmI am here for the first time…really liked your blog 🙂 good lucks with the Blog-a-Ton 🙂
http://chintangupta.blogspot.com
The Fool
15 August 2011 at 5:38 pmThat was a real well crafted poem. That was a story that had to be told as a poem and you used the acrostic form really well. Best of luck for the Blog-a-ton.
You can check out my post here
In search of freedom
Psych Babbler
15 August 2011 at 8:54 pmWelcome here Chintan! Thanks for the lovely comment! Will hop over to your space now.
Psych Babbler
15 August 2011 at 8:55 pmThanks TF for the lovely comment about my post. I’m still in the process of reading all the entries and will hop over to yours…
Sunjoo Krishna
16 August 2011 at 1:07 amWell written poem. But if that coffee makes you think like this, I wonder what you are putting in it? 🙂
Psych Babbler
16 August 2011 at 3:38 amWelcome here Sunjoo! Thanks for the comment! 🙂 and yes, I do have special ingredients in my coffee to help me think creatively 😉 😛
Dimitri Das
16 August 2011 at 11:08 amI was blown away by this.
A perfect 10 for the crazy concept and the creativity.
Absolutely loved this.
Psych Babbler
16 August 2011 at 11:31 amWelcome here Dimitri! Thanks for the lovely comment! Including the ‘crazy concept’ bit…made me laugh! 😀
Shalmalee
16 August 2011 at 1:09 pmAwww…..so so so creative…Loved it! Acrostics are not easy 🙂
best of luck for BAT…
vineet singh
16 August 2011 at 4:22 pmloved your FREE creativity, indeed uniq…lovely
Psych Babbler
16 August 2011 at 10:25 pmWelcome here Shalmalee! Thanks for the lovely comment! 🙂
Psych Babbler
16 August 2011 at 10:26 pmWelcome here Vineet! Thanks for the lovely comment! 🙂
sowmpu m
17 August 2011 at 3:07 pmfree free free…very nice start with that free u finished the whole poem 🙂
beautiful creativity 🙂
all the best…
keep smiling always 🙂
sowmya
rajthecritic
17 August 2011 at 4:24 pmsome work u have put into it….nice flow of words ….loved it…..
here is mine
The search for eternal freedom – A Dragonfly’s curse
Psych Babbler
17 August 2011 at 9:48 pmWelcome here Sowmya! Thanks for the lovely comment about the poem. 🙂
Psych Babbler
17 August 2011 at 10:28 pmWelcome here Raj! Yes, it took a bit of work compared to most poems I write. Thanks for the lovely comment!
Brijender
18 August 2011 at 7:17 amRevenge to gain freedom? Seems almost like an oxymoron.
Coz the more we dislike something, the less the chances that we will ever be able to free ourselves from it-true release would come only from indifference.
Psych Babbler
18 August 2011 at 7:48 amI agree Brijender it is an oxymoron but in any case, someone who manages to escape a domestic violent relationship is never really free because of all the scars left over.
Megha H
18 August 2011 at 6:20 pmnice poem…i like it 🙂
Abhishek Sikdar
18 August 2011 at 7:09 pmNow THAT was interesting. I was thinking on the lines of sexual abuse when I got to the end. I don’t think I’ve ever read anything that began in so serene a manner and managed to get me down somewhere cold. Amazing stuff.
All the best for BAT.
Abhishek Sikdar
18 August 2011 at 7:12 pmNow THAT was interesting. I don’t think I’ve ever read anything which began so serenely and ended in a way that made me visit a cold place. Sexual abuse is what it seemed to me. Amazing stuff. All the best for BAT.
Abhishek Sikdar
18 August 2011 at 7:40 pmAmazing stuff. I have to say I’ve rarely read anything which changed my mood so suddenly and without my thinking. Sexual abuse?
Amazing stuff.
All the best for BAT.
Psych Babbler
18 August 2011 at 11:06 pmWelcome here Megha! Thanks for the lovely comment…
Psych Babbler
18 August 2011 at 11:07 pmWelcome here Abhishek! Thanks for the lovely comment…yes, I was thinking along the lines of someone being sexually abused but also physically abused…in a DV relationship. Thanks again! 🙂
adayinlifeofmom
18 August 2011 at 11:53 pmyour poem is interesting..the desire to escape from torture/abuse…ending left me speechless… I wish abuser was killed
Psych Babbler
19 August 2011 at 12:13 amThanks Adayinlifeofmom! I left the ending vague to be interpreted in any way. It’s interesting you have taken it that the victim killed herself…some others have seen the abuser as being killed while one other person asked me who was actually killed. Deep down, I see it as the perpetrator being killed.
Nidhi
19 August 2011 at 3:32 amloveeeeeeeeeeeeeed the poem and creativity
FREE
nidhi
Vikram Pyati
19 August 2011 at 5:28 amGood one… reminded me of Priyanka Chopra’s character in the hindi movie “Saath Khoon Maaf” !
Psych Babbler
19 August 2011 at 7:54 amThanks Nidhi! Welcome here…
Psych Babbler
19 August 2011 at 8:22 amWelcome here Vikram. Thanks for the comment. Haven’t heard or seen the movie you are referring to
Kalyan
20 August 2011 at 4:37 amlovely lines…beautifully crafted words!
Psych Babbler
20 August 2011 at 4:44 amWelcome to this space Kalyan! Thanks for the lovely comment! 🙂
Ketan
20 August 2011 at 10:35 amDid the girl murder some one…for becoming free
Psych Babbler
20 August 2011 at 10:51 amWelcome here Ketan! She took a life…I left it a bit cryptic in that it could be her own or her long time abuser’s. Deep down though, I feel she killed her perpetrator as that was her only escape from the abuse.
sowmpu m
22 August 2011 at 5:39 amthanks for voting me
:)keep smiling always take care
Psych Babbler
22 August 2011 at 11:29 amNo worries Sowmya…I really enjoyed your poem…