Their eyes met in the darkened club. She knew she should not. It was unlike her to have a one night stand. But maybe, maybe it could be something more. She did have his number. “After cousin Chrissy’s wedding” she thought. Their eyes met again. This time though, he was at the altar with Chrissy.
(c) Sanch Vee @ Sanch Writes (13 October 2009)
This is my first attempt at 55 Fiction so constructive criticism is more than welcome. I don’t even know if I’m doing this right but I’m giving it a go anyway.
Sanch, the writer
13 October 2009 at 10:49 pm@ TearsnDreams: Thanks!
@ Guria: Thanks!
@ Titaxy: Not that creative?! You write brilliant poems woman! It will take time for an idea though…I can’t think of anything else at hte moment 😛
@ Solilo: Thank you, thank you! 😀
@ Legal Alien: Lol! I had to first write it on Word to check if I stuck to the word limit. It is hard esp given that we like to write and write and write…
@ Soin: I guess it’s a common theme, eh?
tearsndreams
13 October 2009 at 4:54 pmThat was very nice.
Life is full of surprises 🙂
Guria
13 October 2009 at 5:17 pmGood one!! 😀
Titaxy
13 October 2009 at 5:53 pmnice… :-).
i’ve been wanting to try this 55 fiction too…but not that creative i guess, nothing comes to mind
Solilo
13 October 2009 at 6:51 pmPB, you got it absolutely right. It fulfills all requirements of a 55-er.
Good one! 🙂
Solilo
13 October 2009 at 6:52 pmYour header is fabulous and whole new look of the blog too. Convey my wishes to your sister!
Legal Alien
13 October 2009 at 7:32 pmnice! i’ve never written 55 fiction because I’m no good at sticking to word limits.. Probably be a good idea for me to try this 😛
soin
13 October 2009 at 9:34 pmdecent one.. but many such similar stuff have been written..free
Psych Babbler
13 October 2009 at 10:49 pm@ TearsnDreams: Thanks!
@ Guria: Thanks!
@ Titaxy: Not that creative?! You write brilliant poems woman! It will take time for an idea though…I can’t think of anything else at hte moment 😛
@ Solilo: Thank you, thank you! 😀
@ Legal Alien: Lol! I had to first write it on Word to check if I stuck to the word limit. It is hard esp given that we like to write and write and write…
@ Soin: I guess it’s a common theme, eh?
Sanch, the writer
14 October 2009 at 11:32 am@ Matt: Thanks! 🙂
@ G: Thanks re the banner and the story. So you liked the twist, eh? Thought it might actually be predictable… 😛
@ Archana: Thank you, thank you…all thanks to my baby sis. That’s what I was looking for all this time — something to make my blog unique. And thanks re the 55fiction too 🙂
@ Shankar: Thanks!
Matt Parker
14 October 2009 at 2:25 amSurprise!lol a nice one.
G
14 October 2009 at 3:40 amNice. Kahani mein twist! 🙂
Mes lilke!!
Hey your sis rocks! Lovely banner. She has said it all in one picture.
Archana
14 October 2009 at 8:04 amOooh love the new look of the blog! 🙂 It’s so original! I’d seen the other layout before here and there, but this one just makes your blog uniquely yours. Very nice. 🙂
As for the 55, nicely done! Life is totally full of surprises, of who, what, when, where. You just never realize how small this world is until situations like that come up.
Shankar
14 October 2009 at 11:06 amThats a good one… good 55..
Psych Babbler
14 October 2009 at 11:32 am@ Matt: Thanks! 🙂
@ G: Thanks re the banner and the story. So you liked the twist, eh? Thought it might actually be predictable… 😛
@ Archana: Thank you, thank you…all thanks to my baby sis. That’s what I was looking for all this time — something to make my blog unique. And thanks re the 55fiction too 🙂
@ Shankar: Thanks!
Smita
14 October 2009 at 6:17 pmSomeones celebration becomes somebody else’s Tragedy at the altar?? 😀
Nice one!!!
Sanch, the writer
15 October 2009 at 8:57 am@ Smita: Thanks 🙂 But the question is…who has been betrayed? 😛
Psych Babbler
15 October 2009 at 8:57 am@ Smita: Thanks 🙂 But the question is…who has been betrayed? 😛
Reema
15 October 2009 at 10:53 amnice!
Aditya
16 October 2009 at 6:08 pmCool 55 fiction. Life is indeed unpredictable. 🙂
And I love your blog look! 🙂
ani_aset
27 October 2009 at 12:22 pmwow lovely this one..Do not reveal secret in title. Punch to come only in last line :)..good start PB
Sanch, the writer
2 November 2009 at 9:24 am@ Reema: Thanks!
@ Aditya: Thanks a bunch 🙂
@ Ani: Ah okay…thanks for the tip.
Psych Babbler
2 November 2009 at 9:24 am@ Reema: Thanks!
@ Aditya: Thanks a bunch 🙂
@ Ani: Ah okay…thanks for the tip.